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... this chapter, only grammar with minimal changes to the initial structure of the chapter, let's see if that helped!

After that, I was thinking if I should redo the chapter, but asking chat GPT to make bigger changes in the structure of the chapter to try and improve it.

What do you all think? Would you read the same chapter twice to give me feedback?

In case you guys are interested, I'll leave the base altered version in Volume 0 after this chapter is posted.

That ...

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